Can anyone give me a feedback on this poem please?

This poem is truly beautiful - Great Job!- but try to make it not such a rush. I know that it may be difficult to understand but you have to make me not want to rush reading it. Sometimes you could also use less similes and metaphors because too much of them can sometimes hide your thoughts and hide the meaning. But if you are a beginner you deserve a round of applause. If you are a little more experienced, try to make the meaning deeper and more intense. You have to figure out that by yourself because no one can tell you how to feel. Well good luck with writing and good job again!!!